I am Ulises a 9th grader from Oakland. My poem is about violence and how there is abusers that kick out the people that were there before them. My poem also describes the homeless people’s struggles.
Violence is Homelessness
Tents in the streets people in there wishing for a better future
People in the tents waiting for money to come in but Its fewer
So after all the poor people living in the tents
Will be waiting for the next abuser
Or for the rent to keep rising
That’s the thing that will keep surprising
Violence is rent increase
Loss of money will eventually lead you to homelessness
Sometimes I be seeing
White people
Walking their dogs in the night
My momma told me to not be out at night
Cuz it’s dangerous
Why are white people roaming the streets
Have they not seen that there is people in tents
That are waiting for their next abuser
And that it’s them that will cause them
To do something like
drugs
Because they can’t handle the pain of not having money
Stuck in the rain
So drugs for them is the way
Kids not getting raised properly
Guardians cant see the way they raising their child
Since they need the money to cover the pain
Hi Uslises Im zaniya from fremont high school Im in 9th grade.And i want to say was i’m so in love with your poem and i think you awesome at writing and you poem inspired me and my friends. so thank you and have a great day
Dear Ulises,
I enjoyed how you express how you see homelessness in Oakland. I thought this was a strong topic to talk about because all around Oakland and many other places lots of people are facing homelessness. Something that you could do better on is rhyming your poem or is repeating a word to make it flow clearly. But overall I like how this was like a statement about what prices raising are making people homeless.
Sincerely, Christina A.
Dear Christina, Thank you for reading my poem. I wanted to address when you said that ” I thought this was a strong topic to talk about because all around Oakland and many other places lots of people are facing homelessness.” I thought this interesting because you addresed that there’s homeless people not just in oakland but other places too